Errors:  

- lifestyle" should be "lifestyles

- studies" should be "study

- is important role" should be "plays an important role

Corrected version:

There is little room for doubt that students' lifestyles play an important role in their lives.

Improved version:

There is no doubt that students' lifestyles have a significant impact on their lives.

Errors:  

- And" should be replaced with "Moreover

- young generation children" should be "the younger generation

- using" should be "use

- internet" should be "the internet

- for their study" should be "for their studies

Corrected version:

Moreover, the younger generation uses the internet for their studies.

Improved version:

Moreover, the younger generation extensively utilises the internet for their academic purposes.

Errors:  

- I tend to support" should be "I support

- background statement" is unnecessary

- school children" should be "schoolchildren" or "students

- it" should be replaced with "which

Corrected version:

However, I support the statement that students are becoming too dependent on computers, which negatively impacts their writing and reading skills.

Improved version:

However, I firmly believe that the excessive reliance on computers by students has a detrimental impact on their writing and reading abilities.

Errors:  

- avoided" should be "avoid

Corrected version:

Teachers should provide proper guidance and teach basic study skills, minimising the use of computers.

Improved version:

Teachers should provide guidance and instruction on fundamental study skills, striking a balance between technology use and traditional methods.

Errors: 

- upsides for computer use

Corrected version:

Certainly, there are numerous benefits to using computers.

Improved version:

Indeed, computer usage offers a multitude of advantages.

Errors:  

- One important information" should be "One important piece of information

- added" is unclear

- same technology using" is unclear

Corrected version:

One important piece of information is that students learn to use technology effectively.

Improved version:

One significant advantage is that students acquire proficiency in technology usage.

Errors:  

- access" should be "gain access to

- amount" should be "a vast amount

- know to use" should be "know how to use

Corrected version:

Students gain access to a vast amount of information from computers and know how to use technology easily.

Improved version:

Students can tap into a vast repository of information through computers and develop ease with technology usage.

Errors: 

- a very good source 

Corrected version:

Computers provide a wealth of data and significant study materials.

Improved version:

Computers serve as a rich repository of data and study materials.