Errors:  

distinct

utilised

diversified

most

utilisation

cars have been increased

where as

walkers have been decreased

Corrected version:

The bar graph represents the different transport modes used for commuting to and from work in a specific European city over three different years: 1960,1980, and 2000. A very noticeable trend is that the use of cars has increased, whereas buses, bicycles and walkers has decreased in the 40-year period.

Improved version:

The bar graph illustrates the various modes of transport used for commuting to and from work in a specific European city over three distinct years: 1960, 1980, and 2000. A prominent trend is the increase in car usage, whereas the use of buses, bicycles, and walking has declined over the 40-year period.

Errors:  

figure of

were continuously fluctuant

consumption was perpetually surged

Corrected version:

Between 1960 and 2000, the number of bus users was continuously fluctuating (17% in 1960, 26% in 1980, and 16% in 2000). However, car usage steadily increased from 5% in 1960 to more than 35% in 2000.

Improved version:

From 1960 to 2000, the number of bus users fluctuated, rising from 17% in 1960 to 26% in 1980, before falling to 16% in 2000. In contrast, car usage steadily increased from 5% in 1960 to over 35% in 2000.

Errors:  

consumption

was consistently declined

were used by 25% commuters

Corrected version:

Turning to bicycles and walking, the use of both these transport modes consistently declined. Bicycles were used by 25% of commuters in 1960 and further declined to 5% in 2000, while walking was preferred by 34% in 1960, 16% in 1980, and 8% in 2000.

Improved version:

Regarding bicycles and walking, the use of both transport modes consistently declined. Bicycle usage dropped from 25% in 1960 to 5% in 2000, while the preference for walking decreased from 34% in 1960 to 16% in 1980, and further to 8% in 2000.

Errors:  

despite numerous fluctuations can be seen in given graph

was the major significant

Corrected version:

In general, despite the numerous fluctuations seen in the given graph, it reveals the fact that car was the most significant source of transport compared to others.

Improved version:

Overall, despite the numerous fluctuations evident in the graph, it is clear that cars became the most significant mode of transport compared to others.