Errors:  

Missing space between "nations" and "(the UK, the USA, France, South Korea and Australia)".

"the year 1980 to 2015" should be "the years 1980 to 2015".

Corrected version:

The provided bar graph presents a comparative analysis of women pursuing higher education across five nations (the UK, the USA, France, South Korea, and Australia) spanning the years 1980 to 2015.

Improved version:

The bar graph offers a comparative analysis of the percentage of women pursuing higher education across five nations (the UK, the USA, France, South Korea, and Australia) over the years 1980 to 2015.

Errors:  

"40% females" should be "40% of females".

"has" should be "had".

"highest number of women" should be "the highest number of women".

"accounted" should be "accounting".

"school-leaves" should be "school-leavers".

"are only 15%" should be "were only 15%".

Missing commas after "accounted at almost 60%" and "followed by France at 50%

Corrected version:

In 1980, around 40% of females opted for higher education in the UK and the USA, whereas Australia had the highest number of women who were interested in higher studies, accounting at almost 60%, followed by France at 50%. South Korea lagged behind as female school-leavers were only 15%.

Improved version:

In 1980, approximately 40% of females pursued higher education in the UK and the USA, while Australia recorded the highest proportion at nearly 60%, followed by France at 50%. In contrast, only 15% of female school-leavers in South Korea pursued higher studies.

Errors:  

"Moving to 2015" should be "By 2015".

"females perspective" should be "females' perspectives".

"have changed" should be "had changed".

"a drastic increase" should be "drastic increases".

"statics" should be "statistics".

"remained same" should be "remained the same".

"got doubled" should be "doubled".

"France have" should be "France had".

"minor increase" should be "a minor increase".

Corrected version:

By 2015, females' perspectives had changed. The UK and the USA saw drastic increases of 55% and 60%, respectively, while Australia's statistics remained the same. The percentage of women opting for higher education doubled in South Korea in 2015. France had a minor increase.

Improved version:

By 2015, females' perspectives had shifted significantly. The UK and the USA experienced sharp increases to 55% and 60%, respectively, while Australia’s figures remained constant. The percentage of women pursuing higher education in South Korea doubled by 2015, with France seeing only a slight increase.

Errors:  

"percentage of women" should be "the percentage of women".

"had gone a remarkable change" should be "underwent a remarkable change".

"four centuries" should be "four decades".

"about gender equality" should be "regarding gender equality".

"women empowerment" should be "women's empowerment".

Corrected version:

After a thorough analysis, it is evident that the percentage of women going into higher education in these countries underwent a remarkable change over the past four decades because of social awareness regarding gender equality and women's empowerment.

Improved version:

In summary, the analysis highlights that the percentage of women entering higher education in these countries experienced significant shifts over the last four decades, driven by growing social awareness of gender equality and women's empowerment.