Errors:  

- travelling (should be 'travelers')

- to UK (should be 'to the UK')

- for the purpose of visit (should be 'for the purpose of visiting')

- between 1994 and 1998 years (should be 'between the years 1994 and 1998')

Corrected version:

The first chart depicts the number of travelers to the UK for the purpose of visiting between the years 1994 and 1998.

Improved version:

The first chart illustrates the number of travelers visiting the UK for various purposes between 1994 and 1998.

Errors:  

- travellers visit (should be 'travelers visited')

- visit to friends and relatives (should be 'visiting friends and relatives')

Corrected version:

In 1994, travelers visited for holidays, business, visiting friends and relatives, and other reasons.

Improved version:

In 1994, travelers visited the UK for holidays, business, visiting friends and relatives, and other purposes.

Errors:  

- There is difference between during the year of 1994 (awkward phrasing)

- at around 22072 (should be 'at around 22,072')

- its may rises about total number 28828 (should be 'it may rise to a total number of 28,828')

Corrected version:

There is a difference between the year 1994, at around 22,072, and the end of the year 1998, it may rise to a total number of 28,828.

Improved version:

There is a notable increase from approximately 22,072 travelers in 1994 to around 28,828 by the end of 1998.

Errors:  

- In holidays (should be 'For holidays')

- the year 1998 is the highest number of visitors seen (awkward phrasing)

- at around 20700 (should be 'at around 20,700')

Corrected version:

For holidays, the year 1998 had the highest number of visitors, at around 20,700.

Improved version:

In 1998, holidays saw the highest number of visitors, with approximately 20,700 travelers.

Errors: 

- The second business purpose (awkward phrasing)

- is almost about 3000 something each year (awkward phrasing)

Corrected version:

Business travel was around 3,000 each year.

Improved version:

Business travel consistently accounted for approximately 3,000 visitors each year.

Errors:  

- The third visitors (awkward phrasing)

- visit to friends and relatives (should be 'visiting friends and relatives')

- followed by 3181 in 1998 (awkward phrasing)

Corrected version:

Visitors in 1994 visited friends and relatives, followed by 3,181 in 1998.

Improved version:

In 1994, visitors traveling to see friends and relatives numbered around 3,181, with a similar trend observed in 1998.

Errors:  

- The other reasons erratically seen (awkward phrasing)

- during 40's and 98's (should be 'during the 1940s and 1990s')

Corrected version:

Other reasons were erratically seen during the 1940s and 1990s.

Improved version:

Other reasons for travel fluctuated erratically during the 1940s and 1990s.

Errors: 

- As compared (should be 'In comparison')

- travel for holidays is higher than other three status (awkward phrasing)

Corrected version:

In comparison, travel for holidays was higher than the other three categories.

Improved version:

In comparison, holiday travel was higher than the other three categories.

Errors: 

- we reveals (should be 'we reveal')

- destinations of visits abroad for main reason (awkward phrasing)

- during the same year 1994-1998 (should be 'during the years 1994-1998')

- but having different countries (awkward phrasing)

Corrected version:

Now, we reveal the second chart is about destinations of visits abroad for the main reasons during the years 1994-1998, but in different countries: Western Europe, North America, and other areas.

Improved version:

The second chart illustrates the main destinations for visits abroad during the years 1994-1998, focusing on Western Europe, North America, and other areas.

Errors: 

- is the highest traveling (awkward phrasing)

- increasing from 19317 to 24159 (should be 'increased from 19,317 to 24,159')

Corrected version:

From 1994 to 1998, Western Europe had the highest number of travelers, increasing from 19,317 to 24,159.

Improved version:

From 1994 to 1998, Western Europe saw the highest number of travelers, with figures rising from 19,317 to 24,159.

Errors: 

- is less travel (should be 'had fewer travelers')

- with 919 and 1789 (should be 'with 919 and 1,789')

- but they updated increase slowly (awkward phrasing)

- about 1823 in North America and 2486 in other areas (should be 'to about 1,823 in North America and 2,486 in other areas')

Corrected version:

North America and other areas had fewer travelers in 1994, with 919 and 1,789, but they increased slowly to about 1,823 in North America and 2,486 in other areas.

Improved version:

North America and other areas had fewer travelers in 1994, with 919 and 1,789 respectively, but these numbers gradually increased to about 1,823 in North America and 2,486 in other areas.

Errors: 

- visitor visit in holidays (should be 'visitors traveling for holidays')

- is more reliable trend (awkward phrasing)

- for the main reason (awkward phrasing)

- is the also most highly seen in destination in chart (awkward phrasing)

Corrected version:

In conclusion, visitors traveling for holidays is a more reliable trend, and for the main reason, Western Europe is also the most popular destination in the chart.

Improved version:

In summary, holiday travel is a more consistent trend, and Western Europe is the most popular destination according to the chart.